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Originally Posted By: Shaper Cirikci if that supposed to be me you spelt it wrong and two you better not make me a rebel. i follow the shapers ways so strongly that i sometimes have to cause myself physical aliment if i want to play a rebel playthrough. Don't worry,only thing you do for the rebels is put them out of their own misery...MWHAHAHAHAHAAAAA! I'll change your name and fix it right away,Cirikci Originally Posted By: Shaper Spddin I think this could make a great story, but the plot is moving a little to fast for my tastes. I hate parts without action,sorry.It sorta slows down during battles and rebel controlled areas...and there's more description.

it's a disapproving look.

Ready to find out? Chapter Five-Shaper Cirikci Sitting in the house was the LAST person Orion would have expected there-Shaper Cirikci,the third greatest shaper ever (next to Shaper Andras and The rebel Shaper Litala).Cirikci heard the door open and was shocked,too.He recognized the Guardian who walked in the door as Orion Des'Xoas,his friend's son. Orion and Cirikci knew each other well,Cirikci was the one who brought Orion to the Academy."Ummm...hi Cirikci,"Orion said,still shocked. "How's it going Orion?"He replied calmly. "Pretty good.I have to leave for Pophyra tomorrow.Alwan's orders." "Hmmm...gotta head up that way to see a couple friends of mine...I'll come with you." Orion shrugged and went to rest for a while.In the meantime,Dakro got a nice shaped sword,recently made.When he got to the house and saw Cirikci,Dakro groaned. He knew Cirikci,and they hated each other."Don't tell me you're going to Pophyra too,"Cirikci said in a pretty ticked off way. "Unfortunately," was Dakro's response before going outside to train with his new sword. TBC...

Lord Iraelithe,you are in the story in at maximum 10 chapters. and Shaper Cricki,wrong,and wrong.

Chapter Four-Dillame The next morning,Orion and Dakro got on the boat and left for Dillame.The ride was uneventful,but long.Five hours after getting on the boat,they saw the outline of many buildings,including Rivergate Keep,the largest building for miles.When they reached land,a Guardian was waiting for them. "Follow me,Alwan wishes to see you." After a somewhat short walk,they made it to Rivergate Keep.The Guardian said,"take a left,a right,then go straight.You'll make it there." They followed the directions,and made it to Alwan. "So,is it true?You are Orion Des'Xoas,son of my greatest warrior,and Dakro Barlan the Sixth,the one to follow the legacy of your family?" They both replied yes. "Well then,why are you here?" They explained the story,Orion about the Drayks and Master Erason's betrayal,and Dakro about the assault he helped fend off. "Damn,Erason was the best person I could put there.Instructions,you ask?Go to Pophyra and visit Lord Iraelithe for me.I would like you to get a report and further instructions from him.By the way,here are some passes to get you past Shaper strong-points.Good luck,men." As they left Alwan said,"Oh yeah,look for house number 218,you are allowed to stay there." They left Rivergate Keep,and Dakro went to buy a better sword.Orion left to find the house. ****** Orion found the house,all right.It was the best house In Dillame.But,Orion knew two people that stayed in here before-Orion and Dakro's fathers.They had been together when they assaulted Northforge Citadel,and Dakro the Fifth killed the Unbound that killed Orion's father. When Orion opened the door,he was shocked at who was there.

What have I done?

only one post so far was helpful surge.Read the post from sharx earlier up. Chapter Three-A New Adventure All of a sudden,four guardians-in-training rushed through the open door.Orion's best friend Dakro Barlen The Sixth asked,"What the hell happened here..." Orion answered,"You don't want to know." "Well,I found a dying rebel lifecrafter and told him,'where is the leader of the rebellion?' and he answered-" Orion cut him short,"-Master Erason." "Actually,he did.How did you know?" "Drayks with the shaper mark on them." "I'm going to tell the Servant Mind." An armor clad Guardian walked up and said,"The Servant Mind wishes to see you." Orion sighed and walked on.When they reached the Servant Mind,they received a strange instruction."Master Dakro the Fifth saw the whole fight and reported it to me,Orion.Good sword fighting.Now,travel to Dillame and get further instructions from Alwan." Orion and Dakro stood there amazed.They were going to see one of the shaper generals. "We will prepare a boat for you,"the servant Mind continued,"and you will leave tomorrow.Good luck,Guardians." TBC...

I have almost finished A3,and A5 and 6 are no real matter since this is the period BETWEEN A4 and A5. BTW,until i finish (said games),the first person to say me gets to take over the topic.They HAVE to use my character as at least a minor character,whether good or evil.

Originally Posted By: 13 Metageitnion E —Alorael, who recommends Tarson's five step program. It will result in a much better understanding of Avernum, and you also get to play fun games. Win-win! Point,my good friend. Step one-Get AV 1 and 2 #2-Finish AV 1 & 2 #3-Get AV 4 #4-finish AV 4 I never could kill Rentar in A3...I never got to it yet... DIE,ALIEN BEASTS,DIE!

I take that as a large insult.

Sigh...more complaints about small matters than COMPLIMENTS (hint,hint).

Originally Posted By: Stormy Weather Does this "Empire of Sand Inc." actually exist in a legal sense? —Alorael, who would like to additionally point out that you don't need to append a copyright notice to everything you write online. First of all, the contents are yours for writing it. Secondly, well, who are you protecting it from, and how are you intending to defend a copyright based on someone else's copyrighted material? No it doesn't exist i was just bored yesterday...lol. You ruin the fun.

Originally Posted By: Drakon Sssharxx I have decided that you can be the hermit becuse then you can be 'Lord Iraelithe' or you were untill you got exiled for questioning some of the shapers more insignificant rules. Besides that way your important aswell, I can see this book being more chapters than the last I think. (0(0(0(0(0.0)0)0)0)0) You... Are... A Genius!!!!!!!! lol

Originally Posted By: Drakon Sssharxx Mate if you going to write a story the chapters are a tad short. Mabey use these two short paragraphs as a plan for the acctual chapters, I find it easier to plan the chapter by writing a basic layout of what will happen and then when I come to write the chapter I add in details like a description of the main charicter and such. Also revise your use of brackets in chapter two, you tend not to get many books that contain brackets, try writing something allong the line of... Click to reveal.. Orion saw the dragonlike beast start to unleash a torrent of flames from between his jaws. He jumps out of the path of flames that strike the guy behind him in the center of his chest. The poor guy screams in agony as Orion lands behind the drayk, he grips the hilt of his father's balde and plunges it into the Drayk's neck which kills it almost instantly. The story itself though is believeable except a novice would be unlikely to defeat the protector of the academy at such an early stage of the story. Good work. Sharx. Who said he kills the protector?lololol. Thank you for the hint.Time to upgrade my writing.I notice that part isn't copyrighted by anyone,so... Originally Posted By: Velzan Greenwood needs better defenses. Yes,yes it does. Lord Iraelithe-How does Pophyra after it's rebuilt sound? © 2009,Empire of Sand Inc. P.S.Open for suggestions/info.

Originally Posted By: Chessrook44 Wait a second, so you're writing a story that takes place one year after a the end of a game you've never played? -.- I read all of the stuff you people post about it...

I guess so.I'll do it. Chapter Two-The Hunt Orion did a Blitzkrieg pass through the rouge filled corridors on his way to the protector.From measly Worms to high powered Cyrodrayks,nothing could stop him.Bloodsword picked up more and more blood,strengthening it.The sword was enchanted in Pophyra by Orion's father's close friend Lord Iraelithe*.It was enchanted to adsorb blood,sharpening the sword's blade.But,it dulled at midnight.The blade's only downside. Right in front of the door to Master Erason's chamber were two creations floating above the ground-Wingbolts.Not good, Orion thought.He and the Wingbolts were shocked by the next move.Orion charged the Wingbolts,and in two mighty blows from his shaped blade,they were dead. Orion cast a heal spell on himself,shaped a Cyora,and adsorbed the essence of a dead Wingbolt. When he approached the master's door, he drew Bloodsword,and bashed the door down.He found Master Erason shaping more rogues,which were smitten by Bloodsword.Erason noticed Orion,and said in a slight English accent,"You're paying for that door,you know." Orion took a heavy swing at the Lifecrafter,but ended up having it bounce off the floor.For a shaper,Erason was fast.He dodged the blow masterfully,drew a somewhat dulled dagger,and tried stabbing Orion.The dulled dagger bounced off the heavy plate armor,and Orion spun around lightning-fast,shaped sword striking Erason's sword arm. {If you cannot stomach gruesome details,DO NOT READ SPOILER.} Click to reveal.. He cried out in agonizing pain,as the sword teared through human skin,flesh,and muscle,almost cutting through the bone itself.Blood spilled everywhere,and even the major healing spells Erason casted weren't enough to stop the flow of blood. Heavily injured,Erason had only one option-teleporting to the rebels to be healed.Just as Orion went in for the kill,Erason teleported away.Where Erason stood last was a note,written hastily and blood-spattered- YOU SHALL PAY! TBC... *spelling changed purposefully Shark-credits for the idea of teleporting magic.It should have been invented by now shouldn't it have? P.S.-It seemed longer when typed here...

Originally Posted By: Eras of Radiance! I believe RC's implication is that Orion's father was one of the A3 PCs, and given his role in Rentar's death he was probably one of the A4 PCs as well. —Alorael, who is fine with that as a background detail for a story as long as the story is good. If the story isn't good then small liberties with blanks in canon don't matter anyway. Orion's father was in A3,and the story is around A4,one year after whatever happened in it at the end. And no,Orion has nothing to do with Xian items. In fact,his armor is blessed platemail,not Xian chainmail. P.S.-Didn't Rentar die in A3?I always thought he did. P.S.S.-Very Off-Topic,but anyone know what happened to Delicious Vilsh?

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I was inspired by Sharx(Drakon Sssharxx)'s thread,A Geneforge story.I might as well make one,you know. But first I need 3 more characters. Please just put a name and description down for your character,first three get in the story! #1-Orion Des'Xoas His father was one of the people sent to explore Valorim,but died while killing Rentar-Ihrno.Orion is a natural born warrior with some magic and summoning skills and is a marksman with a bow and arrow. #2- #3- #4- -=##2112##=-

"Just go all out with the canisters," says the power hungry shaper. P.S.I am making that senence one of my quotes.

I have read sharx's thread and got a very good idea...start my own story!I will add anyone in the story,and if you want Dikiyoba you can be a IFTF(intelligent freindly talking fryora) Book one-The Academy Chapter one-The Tragedy The sound of metal striking metal clanged through the air. At Greenwood Academy,Orion Des'Xoas and many other recruits were training to be a Guardian,one of the three sects of Shapers. While all the other trainees used steel broadswords,he used his father Koran Des'Xoas's Shaped Blade(which was named Bloodsword for it's color). Koran Des 'Xoas was said to be the greatest Guardian that ever lived.Instead of three years of training he passed in one and a half because of his expert skills with the sword.he fought the rebels off the island chain that Greenwood adcademy was on,but sadly died to a rouge Unbound while destroying Northforge Citadel.His son was given the blade he used and was instantly taken to Greenwood academy,to live his father's legacy. One year later,he was an expert swordsman and was almost ready to become a guardian. That same day,a tragedy happened at Greenwood Academy. The Rebellion was still alive,and when they found out that Orion Des'Xoas was at that school,they attacked. Again. The first sign of attack was a Drayk-which somehow made it in through the gate.Orion saw the dragonlike beast start to unleash a torrent of flames from between his jaws. He jumps out of the path of flames that strike the guy behind him in the center of his chest. The poor guy screams in agony as Orion lands behind the drayk, he grips the hilt of his father's balde and plunges it into the Drayk's neck which kills it almost instantly. Orion saw a strange symbol on the creation's scaly hide-the symbol that all novice shapers put on their creations when shaped-Three interlocking blades.Only one shaper in Greenwood could make a drayk-Master Erason,the protector of this school. Instead of going to fight off the creations,Orion went to try and kill the source of the problem. Greenwood Academy's protector. TBC... ©2009 Empire Of Sand Inc. TBC in chapter two.

Excellent story!I might be making one like this,but using a Guardian instead of a Shaper,and on the shaper's side instead of the Rebels. Lord Iraelithe-Want to be in my story as an actual lord? -=##2112##=-

I use the tranier shown on GF4 home page,and it works.scripting just makes you more powerful

original base script begindefineitem 83; import = 68; it_name = "Puresteel Soulblade"; it_graphic_coloradj = 64; it_level = 15; it_value = 5000; it_stats_to_affect 0 = 7; it_stats_addition 0 = 2; it_stats_to_affect 1 = 6; it_stats_addition 1 = 1; it_ability = 58; replace sparkling wand with this with this- "Sparkling Wand"; it_level = 15; it_value = 5000; it_ability = 58; it_graphic_coloradj =64; all credit goes to azuma velius,i just changed the script ----------------------------------------------------------- arua of flames thorns/thorn baton works-yes replace the thorn ability (50) with the arua of flames ability (164)if it does not work,it is because- 1.you didn't change both 2.you just suck

Originally Posted By: Dark Nept RC2112: Personally, Burning Kyshakks are by far the best "Kamikaze Cannon Fodders" in a great fight. Unfortunately, before unleashing its true potential upon death, I died.(Forgotten to heal myself, busy laughing at the corpses of Rebel creations like the Drakons at the last area) LOL!!! now,to the pryoroamers!!(using them at chickweed bridge.alphas go boom!!! going to search for my old script now,if you want to see it go to the newest scripting link.