Posted 10 August 2011 - 12:53 AM
Boo! The beginning to this was actually truly incredible: A depiction of actual trauma. And then the author reminds us that we're still in Blades of Avernum? Doesn't that defeat the point? I was happier not knowing some things: Was she my niece? Ok, fine. But my inner monologue wouldn't say that! And "Not that way" messages here were worse than irrelevant. I have to rate this Average, but the author was clearly toying with powerful stuff. Weirdly, it could have been improved by including less.
(And, now that I think about it, I wonder why I couldn't have mustered the ability to mention the threat to someone. But, I certainly didn't wonder that at the time. Secondly, I guess I can appreciate some of the gratuitous information may have been intended to sabotage the mood to make the mood more poignant through its absence: But the only consequence is that it will be perceived a mistake, right?)